I am thinking of adding a sub-plot to my story where we have say, Adam and Eve. They do not quite like each other but one thing leads to another and they have sex.
After that, Adam wonders if he should do something for Eve, influenced by the fact that he slept with her.
I want to show the erotic scene in the story to explain their motives throughout the rest of the story, but I am torn as to how detailed the scene should be written and even how to describe it altogether.
Should I be abstract / metaphorical (magma eruptions all over the place), or should I be direct (see hidden quote below)?
His erect penis entered her tight, wet vagina.
Any advice on how to approach this would be great, thanks.
Answer
If the goal of the scene is to show why a person decides what he or she decides, then you only give the detail necessary to demonstrate that.
If part of what changes Adam's mind afterwards is the way she looks, you need to focus on her appearance and not the act. ("He watched her face change as he slid into her" or "his eyes roamed hungrily over her breasts"). But if it's about the act, then you focus on how he feels rather than what she looks like ("Sparks of pleasure shot up his spine at each thrust").
If it's not about the act, you can elide a lot of the descriptions of genitalia into pronouns and vague references (he slid himself into her, she took him into her mouth, he touched the core of her, etc.). That gets the idea across without going too far into adult territory.
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