Well, I finally managed to put pen to paper and start writing my first couple paragraphs. I have an issue though. I noticed that the word "the" comes up often. Well actually it was pointed out to me by someone I asked to read it really quick. I did a word count through this site and noticed that in the 2 paragraphs I have written out so far, the word "the" appears 21 times. I am not sure though how I would re-write or get rid of it. What is causing me to repeat the word "The" often or what does someone do to fix repetitive words you can't use a synonym for?
Answer
I am going to paste the first paragraph of "A Farewell To Arms". I'd like you to count how many times he used the word "and".
In the late summer of that year we lived in a house in a village that looked across the river and the plain to the mountains. In the bed of the river there were pebbles and boulders, dry and white in the sun, and the water was clear and swiftly moving and blue in the channels. Troops went by the house and down the road and the dust they raised powdered the leaves of the trees. The trunks of the trees too were dusty and the leaves fell early that year and we saw the troops marching along the road and the dust rising and leaves, stirred by the breeze, falling and the soldiers marching and afterward the road bare and white except for the leaves.
Now, as you can see, Hemingway TOTALLY over-used "and" so his writing must be bad, right? "The" is the same thing. It is a connector. What you want to do is get a rhythm going, and if "the" is your drum beat that makes the rhythm work, use the heck out of it! What counts is not how many times a computer program calculates that you use word X or word Y, but HOW YOU MAKE YOUR READER FEEL!
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