Wednesday, January 30, 2019

style - How to deal with awkward pronoun repetition?


Example from my writing:



Aru smiled back at him and at his thought. “I think there’s no need to find him.” So what if Ichi wasn't a prime number? Their hearts combined would produce a one, one that might make her infinitely happy.


Two.




What to do in cases where you have awkward pronoun repetition?



Answer



There is nothing wrong with the repetition in this case. It emphasizes the important information in a pleasant manner.


If you want to avoid repetition of words, what you can do is



your sentence(s). How to rephrase will depend on the given situation, and asking for and giving help rephrasing passages is off topic on this site.


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